[TOEFL][Writing] Test 3, Test 4, T5 correction

T3

 

[Q1]

- My essay

The reading passage suggest the main reason of Anasazi people's migration is drought, providing 3 assertion to support this. However, the speaker does not believe this idea, at the same time, giving 3 doubts.

 

Firstly, the evidence of malnutrition, asserting in the reading passage as a first reason, could be nothing. Malnutrition was quite common problem for Anasazi people. Even if they were having bountiful season, likely to having relatively more nutriotion, Anasazi people were suffering from malnutrition. So, she believes that malnutrition couldn't be the reason of migration.

 

Secondly, the 'return' plan, guessing in the reading passage as a second reason, is not reasonable guessing. If migration was literally instant problem to manage drought, why they didn't return their original settlement that have strong foundation for surviving. She thinks returning plan has high probability of failure. 

 

Lastly, water supplies matter, emphasazing in the reading passage as a third reason, is not important matter to lead migration. She gives an example of Arizona area. Arizona has climate that percentage of moiture is extremely low. Even if it's notorious to survive, people lived there and still living in Arizona. So, it couldn't be powerful source to prompt migration.

 

- Correction

The reading passage suggests that the primary reason for the Anasazi people's migration was drought, providing three assertions to support this claim. However, the speaker disputes this idea, presenting three counterarguments.

 

Firstly, she questions the validity of malnutrition as evidence for migration - a point raised in the reading passage. Malnutrition was a common issue among Anasazi people, regardless of whether they were experiencing bountiful seasons with relatively more nutrition. Therefore, she argues that malnutrition could not have been a driving factor for migration.

 

Secondly, she challenges the feasibility of a 'return' plan posited in the reading passage. If migration was an immediate solution to manage drought conditions, why didn't they return to their original settlements that had strong foundations for survival? She believes such a plan would likely wrong.

 

Lastly, she contests the importance of water supplies as a motive for migration - another point emphasized in the reading passage. She cites Arizona as an example where people live despite lack of water supplies is not necessarily a powerful enough factor to prompt migration.

 

[Q2]

- My essay

Whether street art is a valid form of artistic expression or problem for property oweners is an important topic worth discussing, which has sparked many heated debateds. Lesile holds the view that they have a positive impact on society since they make tedious things as meaningful one and motivate people to be more intested in art. Although I argree to certain degree, I strongly believe that street art is more likely to become a tool of justification of illegal behavior such as invading of property, propagation of misinformation. 

 

Thus, My view aligns with Finn's opinion that they have an overall negative impact on society since many people could be suffered from their rudeness. I believe that in many cases artistic activities are carried out without obtaning permission from the owner, especially when they does not own the property. It's fortunate if the property owner appreciate the aret and acknowledge freedom of expression, but if not, I reckon there's a high probability it could be considered an infringement of property rights, resulting in increasing of quantity of disadvantage in society instead of advantages.

 

- Correction

Whether street art is a valid form of artistic expression or a problem for property owners is an important topic that has sparked many heated debates. Leslie holds the view that street art has a positive impact on society as it can transform mundane objects into meaningful ones and motivate people to take more interest in art. While I agree to some degree, I strongly believe that street art is more likely to be used as a tool to justify illegal behaviors such as trespassing and spreading misinformation.

 

Therefore, my view aligns with Finn's opinion that street art has an overall negative impact on society due to the potential distress it may cause. In many cases, these artistic activities are carried out without obtaining permission from the owner of the property being used as canvas – especially when they do not own it themselves. It would be fortunate if the property owner appreciates the artwork and acknowledges freedom of expression; however, if not, I believe there's a high probability it could be considered an infringement of property rights, resulting in more disadvantages than advantages for society.

 

T4

[Q1]

- My essay

The reading passage suggests the concept of the congestion pricing and support this idea, presenting three expected results. However, the speaker refutes key assertions of the reading passage, giving three counterarguments.

 

Firslty, he has a doubt the fact that reduction of operating cars leads satey in the road - asserting in the reading passage. Lack of vehecle could change road condition into relatively empty, but there is also prosibility that drivers might drive more faster. And he adds an example of 30% increasing of speed on the road. 

 

Secondly, he disputes the feasibility of the more convienient public transportation - presenting in the reading passage. He clarifies that if people start to not operate private transporation, and use public instead, it's probably likely to be crowded even more that the past, as a result, it would be uncomfortable transporation. 

 

Lastly, the expected reducing of the government cost - posited in the reading passage - would be make negative side effect. While Reduction of cars on the road would reduce delivary cost, there is another profits that produced by drivers, so he says if drivers decrease by the policy, it might be immense attact for other business area.  

 

- Correction

The reading passage suggests the concept of congestion pricing and supports this idea by presenting three expected results. However, the speaker refutes key assertions of the reading passage, providing threee counterarguments.

 

Firstly, he doubts that reducing the number of operating cars would necessarily lead to safer roads - a claim made in the reading passage. While fewer vehicles might result in emptier roads, there's also a possibility that drivers might drive faster due to less traffic. He adds an example of road speeds increasing by 30%

 

Secondly, he disputes the assertion that public trasportation would become more covenient - as suggested in the reading passage. He clarifies that if people stop using private transportation and start using public transit instead, it's likely to become even more crowded than before, resulting in uncomfortable commutes.

 

Lastly, he contests that reducing government costs - as posited in the reading passage - could have negative side effects. while fewer cars on the road might reduce delivery costs, there are other profits produced by drivers. Therefore, he argues if drivers decrease due to this policy; it might severely impact other business areas. 

 

[Q2]

- My essay

Whether restaurant should be located at crowded area or not is an important topic that has sparked many heated debates. Sonia holds the view that the most primary thing is accessibility such as distance from public transit. While I agree to some degree, I strongly believe that If restaurant doesn't have specific concept and target customers, then it might be hard to attracty with only accesibility.

 

Thus, my view aligns with Finn's opinion that restaurant should set target customer first, choosing location based on them. In many cases, accessibility to the restaurant could make a lot of portential customers, but if the restaurant is not attractive itself, then it could be hard to customers get in, leaving them as a 'bubble  or fantasy customers.' I believe that recent trend of choosing restaurant is not only accessibility but also quality of food and design, and latter is getting more important gradually.    

 

- Correction

The question of whether a restaurant should be located in a crowded area or not is an important topic that has sparked many heated debates. Sonia holds the view that the primary consideration should be accessibility, such as proximity to public transit. While I agree to some extent, I strongly believe that if a restaurant doesn't have a specific concept or target customers, it might struggle to attract patrons based solely on accessibility.

 

Therefore, my view aligns with Finn's opinion that restaurants should first define their target customer and choose their location based on this demographic. In many cases, while easy access could attract potential customers, if the restaurant lacks appeal in itself then it may struggle to convert these potential customers into actual patrons - leaving them as mere 'bubbles' or 'fantasy customers.' I believe that recent trends in choosing restaurants are not just about accessibility but also quality of food and design - with the latter gradually gaining more importance.

 

 

T5

[Q1]

- My essay

The reading passage suggests the concept of the "will-o-the-wisp" and presents three assertion to explain this phenomenon. However, the speaker disputes this concepts, giving three counterarguments directly.

 

Firstly, she argues that the chemical reaction might be the reason of the light - as posited in the reading passage - could be wrong asserion. The color of light generated by this phnomenon is green and it different from gases light color which color as we know. So she believe chmical reaction couldn be the key reason.

 

Secondly, she clarified difference between the type of lights demonstrated by insects and the phnomenon. She acknowledge the fact that Insents can generate light. However, the way they illuminate the light is spreading out or blinking which is extremely different from the phnomenon. So, she thinks probably insects might not be the main source of the light.

 

Lastly, she doubts the idead that owl could be the key source of light - as suggested in the reading passage. She even strongly refutes this assertion due to color of the light. The light owl made is white, but it's not exactly the same as the color of phenomenon as we know green. So she totally deny this assertion.

 

- Correction

The reading passage introduces the concept of the "will-o'-the-wisp" and presents three assertions to explain this phenomenon. However, the speaker disputes these concepts, providing three direct counterarguments.

 

Firstly, she argues that the idea of chemical reactions being responsible for the light - as posited in the reading passage - might be incorrect. The color of light generated by this phenomenon is green, which differs from known gas light colors. Thus, she believes that chemical reactions couldn't be the primary reason.

 

Secondly, she clarifies differences between types of lights demonstrated by insects and those observed in this phenomenon. While acknowledging that insects can generate light, she points out their illumination tends to spread out or blink — significantly different from what's observed in will-o'-the-wisp sightings. Therefore, she doesn't think insects are likely to be a major source of this light.

 

Lastly, she questions whether an owl could be a key source of light - as suggested in the reading passage - especially refuting it due to color discrepancies. The owl's light is white while will-o'-the-wisp lights are known to appear green; hence her total denial of this assertion.

 

[Q2]

- My essay

The question of which factor is more attrative shopping leading factor for customer is important topic worth discussing, which has sparked heated debates. Terence holds view that the key leading source is brand reputation .While I agree to a certain extent, I strongly believe that  we can not sure the quality of the clothes with onlybrand power. 

 

Therefore, my view is aligns with Minji's opinion that various adversiment tool could be attractive incentive for shopping. This makes perfect sense because my searching online magazine or watching ads, we can find strange and new but attractive clothes without high trial to find it. Moreover, If we find again and again, we are likely to find clothes that have resonable price, which offline clother store or branded clothes don't have. So, not just looking the brand, if we want to find adequate and suit clothes for us, but also using diverse media and sites to find the best choice.

 

- Correction

The question of what factors most attract customers when shopping is an important topic that has sparked heated debates. Terence holds the view that brand reputation is the key determinant. While I agree to a certain extent, I strongly believe that we cannot guarantee the quality of clothes based solely on brand power.

 

Therefore, my view aligns with Minji's opinion that various advertising tools could be attractive incentives for shopping. This makes perfect sense because by browsing online magazines or watching ads, we can discover unique and appealing clothes without much effort in searching for them. Moreover, if we continue to explore these platforms regularly, it's likely we'll find reasonably priced clothing items - something offline clothing stores or branded clothes often lack. Therefore, not just relying on brands but also utilizing diverse media and sites can help us find the best choices.